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a poem i made for my girlfriend for valentines
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a poem i made for my girlfriend for valentines
Snow is falling on the highlands
An icy wind fills my sails I am leaving the land i love To find something new I have prayed to the gods To let the odds ever be in my favor It's hard leaving here The things that happend haunt my dreams I need a warm home A place with someone i love This twilight tears me apart Land is near I see a woman waving My ship hits rocks Before i could move The ocean pulls me in the deep I hit my hear on the wreckage of used to be my ship The world turns black There is odin, he is speaking to me A silver flash I wake from my dream i ly on shore The ocean in my wounds stings keep me awake I let it all out All of my sorrow it is free After hours I feel warmth My body is still cold It does not matter When i open my eyes A face with a smile more radiant than a thousand suns Eyes that pierce my soul and filled with fire and joy You ask me to speak All i can utter Are my tears Now here i am after a year I gaze into the sea I never left you I silently utter words i held on far to long I pray to odin I thank him with my eternal gratitude Because he gave me you
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That's pretty good. But in section six, you have "ly". Isn't it supposed to be lie?
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Sorry my bad was distracted xD
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I think it's a good poem. I think your girlfriend'll like it.
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Really long, but good. :3
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Nice poem I think ur gf will be happy about this poem:)
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Thanks everybody for the positive responses i sure hope she likes it i worked hard on it xD happy valentine everyone
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Yeah it's a nice poem and your gf will probably like it and will be happy for this poem.
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As a guy, I can relate to this pretty well! You put in a lot of effort by creating that poem, and I'm glad you treat your woman so well! c: I have some respect for you bro, keep treating her well. c:
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hey nice work on the poem and i believe your girlfriend would like this too
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Your girlfriend is lucky
Livet pa en pinne...
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As a girl, I can say I honestly can't see how she wouldn't love that. Putting that much effort into something of that sort is always so sweet!!
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